Oh yes. Such a strong sense of meaning, frustration, passage of time. Great.
I totally agree with jem. This is a good original haiku, and incorporates negative space very nicely too!
Wonderful ku, and I can identify on those rare occasions when I can't sleep!
Thank you jem, alan and roswila, I really appreciate your commentsAnd, all of you, don't hesitate to improve my English !!!
Thanks for the openness to critique on your English. However, in this case, your English is beautifully succinct. It's worth keeping this one for anthologies etc... as it's so good, in both languages!
You know, Damien, they are right: this one is perfect. This should definitely be submitted somewhere.
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