Spring Haiku 2007

Thursday, 5 April 2007

insomnia -
the moon already
a little less round

insomnie -
la lune déjà
un peu moins ronde

jem said...: Oh yes. Such a strong sense of meaning, frustration, passage of time. Great.; 6 April 2007 at 11:17
Area 17 said...: I totally agree with jem.

This is a good original haiku, and incorporates negative space very nicely too!; 6 April 2007 at 13:52
Roswila said...: Wonderful ku, and I can identify on those rare occasions when I can't sleep!; 6 April 2007 at 16:42
Damien Gabriels said...: Thank you jem, alan and roswila, I really appreciate your comments

And, all of you, don't hesitate to improve my English !!!; 6 April 2007 at 20:46
Area 17 said...: Thanks for the openness to critique on your English.

However, in this case, your English is beautifully succinct.

It's worth keeping this one for anthologies etc... as it's so good, in both languages!; 8 April 2007 at 11:42
Anonymous said...: You know, Damien, they are right: this one is perfect. This should definitely be submitted somewhere.; 8 April 2007 at 15:01